Ok, well heres a new installment of those theme drawings im doing for kumlien's figure drawing class. Im excited about how these are all gona come together. This one is uncolored and i like it bettter that way. I shouldnt have colered the first one and Ill more then likely go back and drop the color. we had to do our theme with a sense of environment, i struggled a bit with how to do that while still showing close up faces with a film noir feel, (the backgrounds usually were just black or at least very little was shown) i was hoping the relationship between the figures would give it a sense of space, and that loosely what environment is right?
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This is a great piece. A little shaky on the woman's portrait, but the man's face works sketchy as you have it. The composition and your placement of value is what I like most in this piece. It tells the story well in both the order you learn things and its closeness to its nior inspirations. Good job.
Thanks alot. I appreciate your comments.
im gonna agree with David on this one. its the woman's eyes that are a bit wonky. But with that aside this came out better then the first. and i agree on the color statement. Great work Phil.
could you be more specific about the eyes, im not seeing what you see
I don't see much wrong with the eyes. Maybe they are too big, but with it being noir and her being the femme fatale I think big, seductive eyes are good. I think it's the contour of the face that is off for me. Careful attention to the jawline (keeping it small and feminine, not as blocky) and making sure her forehead doesn't spike on the far side of her face would do her a deal of help. Not enough, obviously, as she is just about to be in a world of hurt...
i agree again with what Dave is saying, though if you want the eyes to be seductive i would make them much more feminine.
Thanks for the pointers guys, ill take another look
I'm liking this one too man. These are all gonna look great together.
Now get those vignetted edges working more as their own compositional element, and I'll have nothing to complain about. Right now, it sort of forms a box, kind of, hugs the figures here and there. It needs some more purpose. I don't really see anything all that out of the place with the drawing personally.
Yeah, i agree totally about the design of the vignette, I was runing out of space in general though, I'll take another stab at it, it is sort of choked up on the figures, no pun intended...or is it O_o
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